I tried something new on my return flight to Singapore. I tried to write a short story about football and the yellow fever. I tried to capture the passion of this support group.
Love for you all to read it and provide Constructive Criticism.
I hope you enjoy
Note: This was a first draft
Find here : Passion – Brothers in Arms: A Footballing Short Story
Edit: Mods move as neccesary
Effective use of metaphor.
Was Gladiator the in-flight movie?
Founder
Last para has a spelling mistake: "Supporters, joint by football, form bonds of brotherhood, of sisterhood and of family"
"Phoenix till they lose"
Posting 97% bollox, 8% lies and 3.658% genuine opinion.
Genuine opinion: FTFFA
Can someone email this to Peter Jackson. Way better than The Hobbit
"Ive just re-visited this and once again realised that C-Diddy is a genius - a drunk, Newcastle bred disgrace - but a genius." - Hard News, 11:39am 4th June 2009
Last para has a spelling mistake: "Supporters, joint by football, form bonds of brotherhood, of sisterhood and of family"
thanks :)
Can someone email this to Peter Jackson. Way better than The Hobbit
I'll take that as a big compliment, thanks :)
Thought of a cover design?
"At the end of the drive the lawmen arrive...
I'll take my chance because luck is on my side or something...
Her name is Rio, she don't need to understand...
Oh Rio, Rio, hear them shout across the land..."